I think it's cool you took inspiration from Vampire System, but you made it way way too similar my dude. I'd suggest reworking from the beginning.
MarKD
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LIKEMarKD:I do want to remake it from the beginning couple chapters but I don't have time. I just use the time when I have nothing to do for writing this novel.
All good man. Have fun with it then and use it as a story board. Flesh out ideas and when you have time take what you really like and use that in the new. erosion
MarKD:I do want to remake it from the beginning couple chapters but I don't have time. I just use the time when I have nothing to do for writing this novel.