Just a bit of constructive criticism, but you gotta work on expressing your ideas about the story. You keep repeating the same thing over and over again, but with different words. I don't need to read 3 times about how Destiny Day is super important for everyone cause it determines their future. I got that the first time. It gets frustrating for the reader when in every chapter you repeat the same information in 3 different ways. 1, it makes it seem like you're trying to use filler to make the story more robust. 2, it can also make it seem like you're treating the readers like we're idiots.
I just wanted you to know that you are 90 percent of the reason I am going to read this novel. Your comment cracked me up.
Yea he wasn't but he was known cause of his sister. He also made himself look weak on purpose in every time-line.
I'm ok with the Vampire Queen. Feels bad to watch her go through character progression and be a good woman to him and not get rewarded.
Your book is far better than alot of other novels. Writing just like everything else takes practice. You know those cool trick shot videos that make you amazed. What you never see is the hours of fails it took for them to succeed. Same with reading a good book. You never see the hours of failed novels the author wrote before to get to novel you are reading. Keep up the good work.