Review Detail of Omnitheus in Becoming a Demon to Defy God
Review detail
Rating it 5/5. Review after CH 7. Some notable things: Writing quality. The author has a good knack with the language used (english) and it is very easy to read and understand. While it doesn't affect the readability, there were times that paragraphs were continuously started with "he" or "the", and could make it repetitive. I would recommend for the author to employ "dangling modifiers" to his writing, and maybe alternate with active and passive voice. It adds more color to the message. Story itself has a straightforward plot of revenge. It is interesting as the subject of revenge is god himself. I want to see how it progresses, whether his rage would deteriorate, or even more aggravated. Character design, so far the MC sticks to his personality. Vengeance driven madness. I particularly liked how the devil was introduced, which maybe mirrored to some literature, but has a unique personality. The power given to MC is also creative as it's more about intelligence and influence, not the brutal type. Overall, this does deserve a 5. Good work!
Becoming a Demon to Defy God
ohremi19
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That's all right, as long as the message is conveyed. But if you want to add color, you can try it this way. Instead of: She was the only subject of my hatred. Try replacing she with more descriptive words like: This despicable seductress (or anything that describes the character) was the only subject of my hatred. That way, you can avoid starting sentences with pronouns. Hope this helps! :)
ohremi19:Thank you for the review. I admit I often got out of idea how to start each paragraphs to not make it repetitive. I'll try my best to fix it. đ
ohremi19:Thank you for the review. I admit I often got out of idea how to start each paragraphs to not make it repetitive. I'll try my best to fix it. đ