I really like your story premise, and find the characters are realistic and don't feel 2d and flat. The story has plenty of potential and could expand /go down multiple different routes. Little thing to polish up on would be grammar here and there which could be done by proofreading, but by no way does it detract from the story (it's only minor). Overall very good job done.
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