Great chapter! The mc is such a vibe, and that second-person intro is entertaining. The only problem is the perspective. It started as second-person, suddenly switched to third-person, then became first-person. Hopefully, you fix that third-person slip(I left a paragraph comment) Other than that, the casualness may be too excessive for my taste and those parentheses need to go, but god this is entertaining!
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