Andry_Reyes
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It was an enjoyable read. The writing isn't the best but it was enough to keep me reading. There were some phrases that could be rephrased, and some paragraphs could be split to make it reader-friendly, but all of these problems could be fixed by just continuing to write. Other than that, the premise kept me hook and I will definitely come back here for more
Omoshiroi
Dying alone is scary...
Great start so far, but I'd split this paragraph into 2. Readers hate wall of text
hmmm it's already chapter 10 huh... I swear it was shorter (in a good way of course)
Hmm... Kinda resembles the setting of Big Hero 6. The word choice is a bit iffy here tho
Character design definitely one of this novel's strong point.
Well, that's a questionable desire, but I wanna see what happens lol
MHHMMMM
hmm
Hmm... this is quite the read. will definitely read it till the end. The plot is intriguing enough, and so are the characters. I'm not particularly a big fan of the overly casual writing at times, and some phrases and sentences needs a rewrite. I'd like to see a deeper side to the characters and just overall improvement to the quality... basically, I'm saying I want more lol. Anyways, good read.
so far*
one more chap and I'm about to finish... good read so fat
hmmm... I see. I'm still working on how to flow better, so I'll definitely consider this