Although I find the story to have potential, with an interesting concept, it has sub-par grammar which I can only get through with monkey-brain mentality. It's as if the author doesn't read through it at all.
PancakesWitch
Liked it!
Said by a true 4yo
PancakesWitch:eh? Your mom has a monkey brain
eh? Your mom has a monkey brain
LinnJH:Said by a true 4yo