Review Detail of empressblackrose09 in Lady Vampire

I have a hard time reading it because I don't know if it's first-person pov or third-person pov. There are times that I don't get who speaks who. The paragraphs are too long. Might I suggest that you cut some of your paragraphs. This is also my writing style before and I get reviews about my writing quality so I change it. Since you are doing under construction of this novel, might as well revise your synopsis as well. Make it eye-catchy so that readers would enjoy reading it. Keep up on writing, author! ^_^