Alright ..lemme start of by saying, yes the grammar could use a little work, but it DOES NOT take away anything from the Great plot... the development of the story starts with the Great Tension of Irianda lost in the forest and gives a backstory of what happened prior. the tension is built up pretty well, allowing the readers to feel curiosity towards Iriandas situation and the reveals in the following chapters do a great job in wanting to know more about Mandy and her husband...in depth that is.. the flow of the story is well done and the character design is good. I trust the author has the ability to continue with this work and gain more traction.. Great work author!
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