Review Detail of Porthos10 in A readable Naruto fanfic. (Naruto, The Gamer, OC)
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the title is false. thus fanfiction is less readable than the others. the author announce a slow development but nothing happen. the transition between the chapter is bad or nonexistent. I'll see in the future if the story becomes better and change my review
A readable Naruto fanfic. (Naruto, The Gamer, OC)
josuamarques
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The point still stands that it is absolutely normal to end a chapter at one point and start at another. Also, what is a fact, is that I do not leave one chapter disconnected from the one before it, as you are implying. And don't play the ego-card my dude, that's not a good look.
Porthos10:you have an egoš if you don't want to take care of my review do it but don't say I said false fact.
I'll be frank. How is my story less readable than the absolute garbage that litters this site? Rubbish fanfics with non-existent grammar or spell-checking. I know for a fact my story is almost error free. So yeah, I'd like you to expand upon that point, because that seems completely arbitrary. Where are transitions nonexistent, I pretty much pick up where the chapters end. Could you give me an example??? Saying that there is no development is kinda harsh in my eyes, but I see where you are coming from. I can accept that. Still, can you address the above points for me? I would like an actual example or explanation for that.
easy. the chapter finish on a discussion and the next chapter. the Mc is already doing another activity. and ok the grammar is essential but you can have a good story even if there is some mistakes
josuamarques:I'll be frank. How is my story less readable than the absolute garbage that litters this site? Rubbish fanfics with non-existent grammar or spell-checking. I know for a fact my story is almost error free. So yeah, I'd like you to expand upon that point, because that seems completely arbitrary. Where are transitions nonexistent, I pretty much pick up where the chapters end. Could you give me an example??? Saying that there is no development is kinda harsh in my eyes, but I see where you are coming from. I can accept that. Still, can you address the above points for me? I would like an actual example or explanation for that.
It is always explained in some way as to what happened in the chapter before then. If you mean the Naruto POV for example, he simply left after crying. Things like that happen. A discussion doesn't have to finish. That's like... really banal. I'd understand your point if I stopped a chapter mid discussion, without a fade-to-black kind of phrase, or just time-skipped back and forth. But this??? Just... Bruh
Porthos10:easy. the chapter finish on a discussion and the next chapter. the Mc is already doing another activity. and ok the grammar is essential but you can have a good story even if there is some mistakes
you have an egoš if you don't want to take care of my review do it but don't say I said false fact.
josuamarques:It is always explained in some way as to what happened in the chapter before then. If you mean the Naruto POV for example, he simply left after crying. Things like that happen. A discussion doesn't have to finish. That's like... really banal. I'd understand your point if I stopped a chapter mid discussion, without a fade-to-black kind of phrase, or just time-skipped back and forth. But this??? Just... Bruh
hey I haven't even started reading yet but this response to his criticism is turning me away from this story even if you disagree with him just dont respond or politely say you disagree dont berate a dude for showing his opinion in a format that's meant to help you improve
josuamarques:The point still stands that it is absolutely normal to end a chapter at one point and start at another. Also, what is a fact, is that I do not leave one chapter disconnected from the one before it, as you are implying. And don't play the ego-card my dude, that's not a good look.
Well, reviews are supposed to be a helpful tool, it's another thing entirely what the reviewer makes of it. And I don't think his review was helpful in any way whatsoever. Firstly, if you can't expand on a point you made, just don't make the point in the first place. Secondly, you can't tell me the ego-card or his base review, where he calls this story 'unreadable' in the first sentence, is respectful to me. I'm human and write this story while working full-time, I won't be unbiased.
_Wessix4Ever:hey I haven't even started reading yet but this response to his criticism is turning me away from this story even if you disagree with him just dont respond or politely say you disagree dont berate a dude for showing his opinion in a format that's meant to help you improve
I mean he gave you two things he thinks you should work on which is the flow with transitions and how you paced the story so I think it'd be helpful, you're just not talking the criticism as well as you should sorry if this offends you but it is my honest opinion
josuamarques:Well, reviews are supposed to be a helpful tool, it's another thing entirely what the reviewer makes of it. And I don't think his review was helpful in any way whatsoever. Firstly, if you can't expand on a point you made, just don't make the point in the first place. Secondly, you can't tell me the ego-card or his base review, where he calls this story 'unreadable' in the first sentence, is respectful to me. I'm human and write this story while working full-time, I won't be unbiased.
and again he wasn't really rude till the ego comment which was brought on by your response by claiming all of the things he noticed wrong with the story are false but it cant really even be wrong because it's an opinion
josuamarques:Well, reviews are supposed to be a helpful tool, it's another thing entirely what the reviewer makes of it. And I don't think his review was helpful in any way whatsoever. Firstly, if you can't expand on a point you made, just don't make the point in the first place. Secondly, you can't tell me the ego-card or his base review, where he calls this story 'unreadable' in the first sentence, is respectful to me. I'm human and write this story while working full-time, I won't be unbiased.