Review Detail of sungoku in Magic Shop System

The granmer is above the average in webnovel. The updates are consistent. You charecter needs a lot of work. The charecter acts like a 13 Year old boy. who’s second chance at life did’t tought him anything. The charecter made referances of Mc systems but doesn’t understand why his system has a quirky personality. World building is big part of the story, so, far the setting of your story remains vague. Please go more in detail to understan The circumstances your charecter is under base on the locations he is. and please read a business book. Your charecter setting is a business, your buSiness Sense sucks, honestly.