Review Detail of gusdefrog in My Boyfriend is a Campus Bad Boy

I gave it a try. The first chapter wan wasn't too bad, pretty well structured, just some... logical flaws. Such as "staying humble and forgiving" immediately being followed by struggling with "controlling her anger". The logical flaws expanded in the following chapters, to the point that by chapter 3 there were some sentances that simply didn't make sense to me. I gave up at the fifth chapter, so keep in mind that the story may very well improve after that. Some of my issues with the logic may be problems of personal definition. The "bad boy" seems to be popular and rich. My mind keeps trying to paint the main character in the image of another famous character by that name. On the good side, there were some very well written scenery and descriptive fragments. Little gems scattered here and there. On the bad side, I felt like many things happened in confusing bursts, that would have been much easier to understand if they'd been described more slowly. Luck in writing the rest of the story. [img=fp]