Review Detail of Protagonist_M in Duality or destiny?

You have a good foundation going. I like that you weave in comedic elements into the character interactions, and have them express emotion in between the dialogue. However, I feel like it still rather too reliant on dialogue and perhaps a bit more descriptive narrative would be helpful to kind of ground the conversation more and allow the reader to develop a clearer image in their head of what is going on. It's great that you have a general direction and have the consistency to go through with it. That's something I always admire. Keep up the good work.