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Yeah, most of the time I can't really have him do anything crazy because his character is just that cautious in the light novels/anime. We all want to see him just melt everyone but that would be out of character, so the best I can do is slowly develop him in a way that allows me to slip in some power fantasy scenes.
Ainz never actually intended to take over the world, he was just admiring the sky of a world yet to be tarnished by human hands, but Demiurge misinterpreted his words and began planning for world conquest. Ainz just went along with it so as not to disappoint the NPCs. He also still holds a fierce pride and loyalty towards AoG and conquering the world to create a better civilization is one way to create something under that banner with which his friends can be proud of.
Yeah, he's dead for now
It's sad because while there are some who want Ainz to return faster, I also have a bunch of people on other sites telling me they don't want him to return so quickly and that I should take my time developing the world more before bringing him back. If I just wanted to tell a story about Ainz stomping I wouldn't have gone in this direction. I would have probably written story about him being transported into the age of the eight greed kings or do a crossover with another franchise. The story is about change and transformation of a world shaped by Ainz's legacy, and how Ainz interacts and reacts to these changes. 17 chapters really isn't that much. It's around 120 or so pages, which is paltry compared to the buildup used in real fantasy literature. I get that people want their instant gratification on this website, but I think it's strange to call a novel like this slow because if anything, I think I rush the plot lines and create a very shallow setting as a result of trying to satisfy admittedly quite impatient reader. :/ There are many critiques to be made about my work, and the primary one is that frankly the world is too barebones and nothing is fleshed out as much as it should be. Another Overlord fanfic, Valkyrie's Shadow, is what I consider the golden standard of fanfic writing. Absolute perfection and far better writing than mine. However, most Overlord fans do not have the patience to digest a masterpiece like that because they would rather see some SAO-type plot where the MC goes around blowing stuff up with a harem than incredible world building and dialogue. Overlord is more than that, imo. Anyway, thanks for reading my rant and as always I'm grateful for the review.
It's honestly been a while since I've read a story in this genre, but you've reminded me just how addictive these types of stories can be. As a Chinese person myself, I can empathize with quite a few of these sentiments. The writing quality is above average compared to the norm for this site, and the overall plot is cohesive and consistently engaging. Best of luck.
You have a good foundation going. I like that you weave in comedic elements into the character interactions, and have them express emotion in between the dialogue. However, I feel like it still rather too reliant on dialogue and perhaps a bit more descriptive narrative would be helpful to kind of ground the conversation more and allow the reader to develop a clearer image in their head of what is going on. It's great that you have a general direction and have the consistency to go through with it. That's something I always admire. Keep up the good work.
Now this....this is a true breath of fresh air. I admit that as I slog through these endless stories plagued with writing I would be generous to call amateur, I have developed a certain preconception regarding the quality of stories available on this website. But this? This has truly humbled me. The writing is easily several leagues above most of the popular power fantasies that litter this site. The atmosphere and emotion depicted is crisp and to the point. Honestly, I would put the quality of writing over even most published paper-back young adult fiction. The transition to Henry Ortega's encounter with the apologetic killer was amazing. The closing paragraph of the prologue leaved me wanting more. Phenomenal work.
The honor is mine, my friend. I've read five chapters of your novel so far and I have to say that you've done something I simply do not have the discipline and ambition to pull off. Anyone can write a fanfiction like me but to build a new world like you have and to have consistently grown it to such heights is something truly special. That enthroned angel is like nice Imperius :P