Review Detail of vinthakadha in Herculean Machine (Hiatus)

the story is good and makes the reader want to read more. but there are some issues which i think can be fixed easily. for example, the constant switching from third person narration to first person narration is confusing and keeps the readers away. another issue is the use of tenses. continuity of tense is very important in a story. inclusion of dialogue could also make it more interesting. i hope to see these improvements and the story become even more gripping than it is now.