Review Detail of Mithren in I Experienced an SSS Encryption

There might be an interesting story in there but it is soo badly written that I can't immerse myself at all. It needs a complete rewrite and the author needs, I repeat, NEEDS to do a better job researching the country they are setting the story in. Using incorrect references breaks immersion and ruins the story. The author needs to be more consistent with the world view. There are many more flaws but I'm unwilling to write an essay just to point them all out. I don't know if this is a westernization of a Chinese book as some suggest but if it is I strongly recommend having a westerner do the rewrite or at the very least have a westerner proof read the work.