Review Detail of Bob_Doe_0125 in Starting With A Space Battleship

Tho I love this story and concept it is very poorly written grammar wise. at times it flows very well. then suddenly you can't tell who's talking to who. sometimes it just blind sides you with random happenings with no explanation or context to why. is it a he or a she...? why is this happening when did we get here why is it going on. hope to come back to it. but gotta put it on a back burner for a while.