The Good: Interesting start and the plot is still relatively hidden. Keeping up the mystery can draw more readers as long as it isn't prolonged to the point of making those readers bored. The Bad: Many grammar mistakes, readability is below average. Try and give each chapter a good readthrough before posting, or ask a friend to do so. Just by reading it you will catch a lot of the mistakes and/or improve the structure to make it more readable. The Neutral: First book so I'm trying to be a little more gentle than usual with my review. I think you have something good going here and it is nice to see a rather normal setting compared to most other FL novels. Just giving her her own kids instantly breaks away from the most common FL character tropes. If you think you need help, feel free to ask.
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LIKEmaddy_romanzo20:Thank you so much for your input. I will review and correct my grammar. In chapter seven hints to where the plot is heading will be coming. I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts.
Discord is an app for chatting privately and as groups. Many authors here host servers for it and I believe WebNovel itself has one too. If you don't feel like adding it to your phone or PC, what do you use for chatting?
maddy_romanzo20:No, I haven't heard of it.
I'm Lord Sputnik#9955 on Discord, if you don't know how to add me on it, you can tell me yours and I should be able to find you. It'll be the name you chose followed by #XXXX XXXX being a random 4 digit number.
maddy_romanzo20:I downloaded discord.
Lemme know on Discord how to send you what I've worked on so far. (I'm not sure if you've been checking Discord since I know you're new to it.)
maddy_romanzo20:maddyromanzo#7879