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LordSputnik

LordSputnik

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2018-06-14 JoinedUnited States
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Posted

    Shameless self 5-star review If I had to say anything negative, it would be that this could stand on its own. I would have to spend much more time explaining certain things though if you're not familiar with the Macross universe. Still added an appendix though just in case.

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    Macross: Destiny
    Anime & Comics · LordSputnik
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Replied to ONE_ABOVE_ALL

    Sounds interesting! Macross + Gundam that is... Take it a step further... Blue Gender + Full Metal Panic + Macross + Gundam + a tiny bit Gurren Laggan just for luls would be a true Frankenstein of a story. That might be a little too much because it's hurting my head thinking about it.

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    Macross: Destiny
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Posted

    Being a little generous since this seems to be the first non-fan-fiction by the author. The Good: I like that it doesn't try to be anything more than it is, just a pure male-driven smut story. The cover is also a nice choice. The bad: Short chapters means short sex scenes. Asking for stuff at the end of every chapter is a huge turn-off too. (Especially annoying if you use the audiobook function.) The sex scenes themselves aren't bad, but they lack imagery to draw you in and make you feel like you can see it. This would also be solved with longer chapters. The Neutral: Keep it up, by straying away from fan-fic you can finally build your own complete cast of characters. Most of us have a certain trope we like and there is nothing wrong with using tropes. If you do use tropes, just give them enough substance to stand up without a crutch.

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    A Bet with Slutty Evil Being!
    Fantasy · dxd_no_hentai
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Posted

    The Good: Good effort on the author, especially for a first novel, keep it up! Sadly, that's about all that is good. The Bad: - Many, many mistakes grammatically. While not completely mind-numbing, it causes everyone to stop momentarily and break immersion. - The characters are quite shallow, part of this can be blamed on the first-person point of view though. - The skills and stats are a little overkill at times. - Starting off in 3rd person and then switching to 1st person was quite awkward. Staying in 1st person and constantly forcing us to break away from immersion with the huge lists was also painful. First-person is meant to be used to create an intimate relationship between the narrator and the reader. - This screams adult content, but it only teases it. I personally am also not a fan of incest and simping on one's own sister makes me cringe. - MC is overpowered, nothing wrong with that, but it needs to be done better in this case. The Neutral: - LGBQT is fine, but why is it used in this? I feel like it is a plot crutch in this novel. Something that is sorta helping hold up the plot, but would be better off with a stronger plot overall. - I do love skills and lists of skills, but go easy on them sometimes. We're not going to remember all of them, nor even try to if the lists get too long. - Have fun with the story. Instead of a typical truck-kun death, I would go the extra mile. Like maybe say he was about to go on vacation with his girlfriend, as they were about to take off, she confessed to cheating on him, he panics, runs out of his seat, pushes the flight attendant out of the way, opens the door, ejects the emergency slide and jumps down it. He hits the slide the wrong way, bounces and then gets sucked into the jet engine... something silly and unbelievable.

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    Reincarnated as a Son of the Sword Saint and the Sage
    Fantasy · Jrmb_Eleven
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Posted

    Excellent quality as always from dumdum! A romance with cute characters being cute. Some may say it isn't original, but who cares because it does what it does very well. Entertain us with a story about characters we can actually like or dislike.

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    The CEO's Choice
    Urban · dumdum007
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Two Options
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    The CEO's Choice
    Urban · dumdum007
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Replied to ONE_ABOVE_ALL

    It's such an underrated series, I just wish that the most recent one wasn't so generic. Macross Frontier was the best in terms of characters and story, but Macross 7 had the best music, in my opinion. (And the story wasn't so far behind Frontier)

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    Macross: Destiny
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 14 Operation Corey (1)
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    The CEO's Choice
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 6 Too Casual (1)
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    The CEO's Choice
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Commented

    Thank you for the chapter, Ma'am!

    "Ma'am? DID YOU JUST CALL ME MA'AM?" The lady yelled on top of her lungs, garnering attention from the passersby and the people who were already waiting in the hotel's lobby.
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    The CEO's Choice
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Posted

    Not good... I normally like to give in-depth reviews, but this doesn't deserve that. If this is an apology to women in China, then it makes a little sense. I'm hoping the author will use what they've learned from this to make a better novel next time.

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    New Father: Empress Appearing On My Doorstep With Our Daughters
    Eastern · Cloud Fire Pheonix
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik1yr
    Replied to Nite_nite

    Lost my muse for a bit, trying to get it back. I had a place where I wanted this story to go, but as usual, the story decided to go somewhere else.

    Ch 48 New Beginnings
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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Commented

    MCs product?

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    The Mind World And The Outcast Hero
    Fantasy · Prince_nonchalant
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to Sesshomaru_

    It's about Count Agist and Lillica, but that doesn't mean that they are exclusively together. I explain more about what Lillica is after a little bit later. He knows what is going on, and saying they slept with the knights is a little extreme since Lorraina only sleeps with the 2 brothers and Lillica "helps" Morgan. Lillica makes it clear to Morgan that her help is just that and nothing more and even talks to Count Agist about it in Chapter 18 (If I remember correctly) I do agree that the world is a little hard to understand since we only ever experience 3 named locations, The Count's estate, Farmington, and Flint, as of the first volume. (Yes, we are briefly introduced to the capital in the last chapter of volume 1 and another no-named village, but its name isn't important.) I should probably try and give the world a brief overview then since we only some vague locations to go on.

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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to Squirrel_Protector

    I've written worse. Not sure if I should be proud of that or not.

    Ch 4 How to take care of your Ax [R-18+]
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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to Eje_Cecilia_Alo

    I've hinted already that Isadora isn't a virgin, but I haven't said how she lost it. Honestly, I've been thinking about changing what I had planned originally because everyone seems to want happy stories nowadays. Also, he never defiles her, just absorbs the energy she gives off through her pain and merely touches her ankle. (Next chapter might make it up to you)

    Ch 20 Nightmare
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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
    Fantasy · LordSputnik
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to AmateurAuthor

    No problem, when you delete it, that will let me know when to give it another go.

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    Tales of the Rebirth Apocalypse Emperor
    LGBT+ · AmateurAuthor
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to bagelguyofficial

    Feel free to claim all of them... unless one has already been claimed.

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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
    Fantasy · LordSputnik
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to LORDFIFTH

    No, everyone gets with everyone. Lorraina is very... open about her sexuality so she sleeps around much more than Lillica. Lillica only uses it as a means to an end and makes sure that Agist knows about it when she does it with anyone she doesn't kill. I attempt to do girl-on-girl, but I admit that since I am a guy, my experience with that is lacking.

    Ch 7 Endless Pleasure [R-18+]
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    Lust, Power, & Desire [R-18+]
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  • LordSputnik
    LordSputnik2yr
    Replied to Aeipathy_02

    No problem, I lost track of where I was so I was re-reading portions of it and thought it was strange that twins would have different ages.

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    HAPPY EVER AFTER
    Fantasy · Aeipathy_02
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