Review Detail of FrankJack in Harry Potter: New World

Story wise I only got to chapter 20, I understand English isn’t your first language and that’s fine. It’s not my first either, but the plot points and character explanation is plain. There’s no world building, only plain expository text. Like “the Hogwarts building” or the “city of London” don’t get me wrong you did a good job in diagon alley. But you didn’t go into complete details. And the scene of which a mother forgets her son’s face, yet the father remembers it. It but odd really. In the end I’ve decided to drop it. Chapter 20 is way to confusing, random appearance of “creatures” and boredom have left no where to go. So I’m dropping it.