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Review Detail of L_Arc in Spring in my step. {dropped}

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L_Arc
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Spoilers may be found below. This is essentially a crack fiction and wish fulfilment. There is no goal that the protagonist has. No foreshadowing for an enemy that could oppose him. But let’s move to the proper review. Be warned though, there are only 10 chapters as of this moment so my entire review is based off them. . . . Writing Quality: 2 1. This is written like a report. When I was reading it, I felt like I told someone to report to me the events that took place and make it humorous. Which really doesn’t go well together. There has not been a single proper dialogue in the novel. . . . Updating Stability: 4 2. There are only 10 chapters as of this moment within 3 days. It is entirely possible that the author will not be able to keep updating this quickly. . . . Story Development: 2 Character Design: 2 3. To be honest, this 2 is more out of me being unable to give 1 star to someone to has put in so much effort into writing. (It is very hard to write a story, especially with such worlds.) As of this moment, there is no story. It is detailing the journey of a man transmigrated into Bellamy, who happens to be the Grandson of Vice-Admiral Tsuyu (This wasn’t stated in canon so it’s AU.) There were multiple storylines that could have been turned into arcs but it wasn’t to be. He gained a lot of strength in a very short time. As a reader, I was unable to gain any fulfilment out of his growth. There was simply no struggle. No reason to be strong. He just decided, for no reason whatsoever, to become strong. And get a Harem. Ugh... harem. I can understand 2-3 women but more than that is just overdoing it. Then it just becomes a Waifu Catalogue. It’s like being Ash But horny instead of adventurous. “Gotta Catch ‘Em All!!!” Also, tbh I didn’t really note any age given of the man who transmigrated but there was almost nothing whatsoever. It is as if the person who transmigrated was a trash of society who only watched one piece and a few other anime. There has been absolutely no discussion of his friends, anything he would miss. He transmigrated and was all, “Alright!!! Yeah!!!!” I felt like I was reading about a baby psychopath in the making. The other characters are also not very touched upon. They act very much like extensions of his will then their own people. . . . Just realised I already talked about character design earlier. World Background: 4 This is the one piece world and although, the author hasn’t captured the essence of the world, I mean he hasn’t really given his own take on the world. He has drastically increased the competence of the researchers living there but that doesn’t really hold any meaning. Where is the overpowering sense of mystery as to what is the ‘one piece’. The truth behind ‘Devil fruits’? The history of the fabled ‘Void Century’. . . . Well, that was my review. I think this is the nicest review I have ever written. Huh. Interesting. . To the Author: Keep writing and I look to forward to seeing where you take this story. Will you drop it? Will it go on an undefined time of ‘hiatus’. Or will it continue. Also, is the thing about Bellamy being a reverse of Luffy true? To other readers, I hope this review helped.

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Spring in my step. {dropped}

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BRACKKUSama_z
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Glad that im not the only one seeing the cracks in this story

notlair
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this i also felt betrayed when at the start the story feels serious or along those lines, then author turned it into a crack fic,