Review Detail of Necroghan in Unflag:Deity's Game?

I feel like you would benefit from proof reading. Also maybe toning down the swearing a tiny bit lol. Although we all swear I feel like if its not relevant to the story then maybe trim it out. Save it for special occasions, like when some really messed up stuff happens! Then your readers will know its serious!! I did think however the use of kind of little codes throughout the story was pretty cool. Overall I'd say it was ok, some interesting ideas in there, the story was interesting in itself. I'd like to know where it ends up. Keep at it!