The first thing I took a liking to was the dialogue, it's pretty well written and has charm to it. The pacing is a bit fast for just the 1st chapter and their are some minor grammar mistakes but nothing major. Overall the beginning is really good and enjoyable. It makes you wanna see what happens next. Good luck with your writing journey!
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