Review Detail of D_Wolf in Conquering the Universe with my Sister

The story concept is fun and interesting, though there are quite a few errors in the writing. Examples: using the wrong numbers in some locations, or not even putting the class in place in the general's character sheet. Additionally the quality of language is rather poor, not to the point of Engrish, but it is in desperate need of an editor. As the story is currently ongoing I have no idea what the author will be doing moving forward.