Review Detail of GnawingJackal in Reborn as a Villain in Tales of Demons and Gods

The story is very rushed in it's pacing but the critical flaw in its telling is that it lacks all of the face-slapping that TDG and LOHP were built around. The MC really needs some problems to solve. The MC just seems to accomplish everything with a hand-wave. Make him suffer or the story will be lackluster. You need to add in worries and misunderstandings from Shen Yue's friends to create Conflict in the MC's relationships. With Shen Yue's decision to randomly go incognito you need to create random a**holes who will try to pick on Shen Yue so the MC can get a good curbstomp in, violent conflict. Conflict and more conflict! What's the point of being a Gary Stu if no one can put up a fight, damn it?!