Review Detail of TaintedMetal in Supreme Legacy

I've been aware of Eastern Fantasy, although this is one of those novels where I'd actually get the chance to go through it and see what plays out. So far, this is a good story. The plot moves forward with good transition and there isn't any unnecessary telling. Something I would comment on is that some actions scenes are being told rather than shown. This isn't a huge problem but some of them are best relied on imagery and maybe some display of how the character feels as he's in the action sequence. Some paragraphs are also too big in addition, too many sentences. Eventhough I could read them myself but it's best you space them out so it's easier to read, especially for the audience that reads this on mobile. Keep on continuing author. Regardless of my criticism concerning the telling action sequences and big paragraphs this is a good foundation for the novel. Keep on writing.