Review Detail of Havency_Taylor in A Highest Rank in Another World!
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Decent. Author has a very strange, overly formal way of writing. There was absolutely no storytelling at all. None. It was all inner monologue in a strange way. It was spoken as if the MC who was previously an adult male, was oblivious to the world and any common way of speaking or common sense. It was as if every waking moment was a mystery and he truly acted as a child despite having the mind of a super powerful, s-rank adult adventurer. Unless his s-rank was his rank in preschool or a debate club, I can’t see the character being anyone but some clueless farmerboy. Great potential and idea, but the terrible style of writing threw me off. The grammar was also very bad, but I can overlook it.
A Highest Rank in Another World!
IgorRSAWs
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The MC is giving off a vibe that he is writing A daily diary, that’s the feeling I’m Getting at right now. What’s Confusing Is that the story is using a first person point of view/ third person narrator Point if view, and a bit of 4th person point of view. For most book’s authors Tend to stick with only one, some might use FPPOV and TPPOV, but using third person narrator Point of view, just makes readers feel like the MC is the narrator talking about his past. I recommend Reading some Japanese LN the same genre of your novel, it can give you a idea of what type of POV you should use.
IgorRSAWs:You make a good review, thanks. I'm trying to improve character characterization, I try to diversify a lot in character appearance (I think I made a lot of beautiful characters so I decided to make some ugly ones lol) What about writing mode. I prefer to write in the first person, but currently, in the current chapters, I'm at a point where 90% of the chapters are entirely in the third person. About the lack of emotion, I also feel very frustrated. Although I try to do battle choreography, and I try to provide some tension, I always fail to do that. I read my chapters myself and see that it's not good enough, but I can't improve it even by adding extra details and doing everything to make it perfect. And about grammar, I'm trying to revise and adjust everything. I'm going back to the old chapters and trying to fix as much trouble with pronouns. And taking advantage of you're reading, could you tell me where you're more confused? When I go back and editing I will be able to edit in a more understandable way.
Is writing in a formal way weird? Okay. I accept that you complain about the grammar, but the way I write it I DON'T ACCEPT. What about his mentality, did you really read my novel? Or are you just pretending to read it to give a negative review? You just forgot everything he ever did. And about the monologue, the novel is mostly in the first person, my novel is telling what is going on in the protagonist's head, what do you want me to do? Thanks for the review anyway.
There will always be good reviews And bad reviews, I’ve Only read up to chapter 5, and the vibe I’m getting From this novel is the same as those generic ( I was a Ex hero and I got reincarnated Into another world with a op system ), not trying to hate or anything, but your writing the novel in first person point of view, and third person narrator Point of veiw and sometimes 4th person point of view, which is very confusing. You have to also check for grammar issues, and the novel is lacking of emotion, Example: ( I made a fireball the size of a rock. I feel excited ), you can also improve the detail of world design, and unique character traits.
IgorRSAWs:Is writing in a formal way weird? Okay. I accept that you complain about the grammar, but the way I write it I DON'T ACCEPT. What about his mentality, did you really read my novel? Or are you just pretending to read it to give a negative review? You just forgot everything he ever did. And about the monologue, the novel is mostly in the first person, my novel is telling what is going on in the protagonist's head, what do you want me to do? Thanks for the review anyway.
You make a good review, thanks. I'm trying to improve character characterization, I try to diversify a lot in character appearance (I think I made a lot of beautiful characters so I decided to make some ugly ones lol) What about writing mode. I prefer to write in the first person, but currently, in the current chapters, I'm at a point where 90% of the chapters are entirely in the third person. About the lack of emotion, I also feel very frustrated. Although I try to do battle choreography, and I try to provide some tension, I always fail to do that. I read my chapters myself and see that it's not good enough, but I can't improve it even by adding extra details and doing everything to make it perfect. And about grammar, I'm trying to revise and adjust everything. I'm going back to the old chapters and trying to fix as much trouble with pronouns. And taking advantage of you're reading, could you tell me where you're more confused? When I go back and editing I will be able to edit in a more understandable way.
Pizza_and_pants:There will always be good reviews And bad reviews, I’ve Only read up to chapter 5, and the vibe I’m getting From this novel is the same as those generic ( I was a Ex hero and I got reincarnated Into another world with a op system ), not trying to hate or anything, but your writing the novel in first person point of view, and third person narrator Point of veiw and sometimes 4th person point of view, which is very confusing. You have to also check for grammar issues, and the novel is lacking of emotion, Example: ( I made a fireball the size of a rock. I feel excited ), you can also improve the detail of world design, and unique character traits.
And about the details of the world, in the current arc, is a war and I'm developing several countries and cities. I plan to put different cultures in each one. I hope to make it!
Pizza_and_pants:There will always be good reviews And bad reviews, I’ve Only read up to chapter 5, and the vibe I’m getting From this novel is the same as those generic ( I was a Ex hero and I got reincarnated Into another world with a op system ), not trying to hate or anything, but your writing the novel in first person point of view, and third person narrator Point of veiw and sometimes 4th person point of view, which is very confusing. You have to also check for grammar issues, and the novel is lacking of emotion, Example: ( I made a fireball the size of a rock. I feel excited ), you can also improve the detail of world design, and unique character traits.
Pizza_and_pants:The MC is giving off a vibe that he is writing A daily diary, that’s the feeling I’m Getting at right now. What’s Confusing Is that the story is using a first person point of view/ third person narrator Point if view, and a bit of 4th person point of view. For most book’s authors Tend to stick with only one, some might use FPPOV and TPPOV, but using third person narrator Point of view, just makes readers feel like the MC is the narrator talking about his past. I recommend Reading some Japanese LN the same genre of your novel, it can give you a idea of what type of POV you should use.