you have a very good story but I think you are over explaining things, for example you don't have to tell us that the babies in the woman's belly were rean and death till after they were born, there is also no need to explain why they can't understand the luck their mother was speaking. give your audience the opportunity to have their own imagination. in truth your story line is good
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