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The author is trying to incorporate both fictionnal spiritual energy and normal scientific principles. GOOD points: The story/plot is good. Characters are also neatly fleshed out. Cultivation also seems realistic BAD points: 1.So much plot unrelated to cultivation(like throne mission ,kinda seems like author got bored of his own story and suddenly decided to blow up the whole planet,not that i am complaining ,twist was good but if author already decided to blow up the planet why waste so many chapters on roan and rean planning on how take the throne and also recruiting quira by franden(dont know that names properly) its kinda dragged out.).Some events dont need to explained/dialogued detailed, summary would be fine. 2.Story pace seems to kinda slow.700 CHAPTERS but still both protag only reached nascent soul. 3.And pleasentaries should be cut down.So many dialogues its like a theatre script. 4.Author week point might have been physics. example: in 702 chapter he implied that due to low spiritual energy planet was cooled.Does that even make sense, please i know its fiction but still i felt dumb reading that.spiritual energy is supposed to be neutral how the heck planet started to warm up after spiritual energy restored.I always thought may be planet is so far away that planet was cool. 5.And regarding yin and yang its very confusing.you have mixed several different cultivation systems and its hella confusing.Controlling yin energy to control different yin types of elements?but weren't they absorbing spiritual energy or elements? where the heck did the get only yin energy?.

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Death... and me

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Lumi000
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Yes i agree the story has a lot of plotholes. Maybe because he writes 12 hours a day that he is doesnt think that much when writing or maybe it is just a lack of a good editor. Maybe the author only proofread the story checking for grammar and spelling mistakes only and not so much on the logic of how the world works even if it is fiction.