Review Detail of MrCarbonite in Is always Happy After Ending?

First off you do have a good story line with a good set of characters. However, your tense work and your grammar could really use some work. For me it broke the immersion more than once. Maybe use spell check or grammarly. Personally I'm not a fan of text talk like tho. All in all a good book though that I can't wait to read more of.