Review Detail of Moe_Cyan_Pile in I Just Called To Say I Love You 

Okay im gonna be straight to the point here. First of, your doing good on story development, which in turn, is nice. But I'm just sorry okay. I have to point this out so that when other people read your novel, a good first impression would be given. Also, I'm a person that pays attention to details so I'm just sorry for the critic if it's harsh you know. Here's the point, Grammar mistakes and character mistakes. First of, on your first chapter, character mistakes can already be seen. After saying a dialogue, you don't put 'young man' but you put 'the young man'. Presumably because the character is not introduced yet. Also you put 'women' instead of 'woman' on some parts. Pls take note, women=many, woman=a single person. Now when you have character mistakes, it just ends up with having grammar mistakes as well. That's it. Overall though, good plot and story development.