Review Detail of Wayward_Scholar in Emotion Rage: Enchanted World

Okay so since there's only one chapter to go off of I can't really say much. The story and the world has been established smoothly which is good. MC wakes up in a new world with a body 5 years younger than his original. Character-wise, Vula has been developed nicely, even moreso than the MC Ceraun imo. I'm not sure if this was your intention or the characters natural speech pattern, but some of the dialogue is a bit choppy. (e.g "I'll explain to you everything, Now listen close, very closely.We only have 30 minutes all in all for me to explain it to you. Sit down here, kid!") Instead of mashing all those details into a single speech bubble, you could spread them out a bit between actions and make add some detail around them. For example Vula could be like: "I'll explain everything to you, now listen close" *Ceraun stood idly in shock over the sudden turn of his life* "We only have 30 minutes all in all for me to explain it to you! Sit down, kid!" Sorry this review was a bit long, but since there was only one chapter I couldn't really review much and just decided to give some suggestions! Keep going, its pretty good start so far!