Review Detail of Hunter_Fitch in My Magical System

Not gonna lie your grammer is trash and you should probobly fix that but besides that you should also be more in depth about topics like when he lit the candel he mentions he has a sister but thats something that should have been mentioned when you introduced us to the uncle not on ch 40 Besides that you have a really Good idea it is like a 7/10 right now but if you could fix the grammer and plot holes its a 9/10 if not 10/10 story