Review Detail of Jenjibread in To Rise Again in the Apocalypse [BL]

To be quite honest, this is my first time reading anything from this genre so I was a bit lost in the first chapter. But the world-building that was slowly clarified later helped a lot. I think the main issue I had when reading the story was how the sentence beginnings were not varied, leading to a lot of repetition. If you can fix that I think the writing quality will definitely improve. Good luck!