The story really be storying guys. reviews are difficult to write let me just write random stuff here. There we go, hopefully this works well.

The plot is developing, but I would suggest working a bit on the writing quality. Use grammarly or other grammar checkers to catch minor mistakes or something, because sometimes it can be difficult to notice on a fist read.

There's potential, but I'm not the audience. I think you should look towards other authors in the genre and see what they do. Ok, that's all.

I keep editing stuff and my paragraph comments disappear.

Ignore the reading status, I went back to reread. This story has a lot of potential, though it doesn't develop the stakes immediately, and is a bit more of a mystery when it comes down to it. Looking forward to reading more.

Read the prologues first.

Thats the first chapter, not the first chapter of the novel. Damn it, I hate how webnovel skips over the prologues.

Let me know what do u mean by beginning? Like prologue or chapter 1? I think people tend to find chapter 1 confusing when they accidentally skip the prologues.

Alright so here’s my critique: chapter kind of reads like AI, cause every chapter ends with a: and so the hero’s embark once more tupa stuff. Remove that, and just end the chapter on a cliffhanger.

So far, it’s really good, although I do have to say that the chapter starts of a bit grizzly for any of y’all that aren’t super into that. Gonna continue reading this novel and post my final thoughts on this review.

fight.

flute

pot.