Review Detail of goodlion in Divine Talent Born Mortal

Hey, are you still writing this book and would you like help?

with chapter editing do you say?

harem +18 ?

The MC Will have a girlfriend or Harém?

yes

Haren yes, +18 no

you really do have problems with ur grammar, or are you writing it in mobile?

I really have problems with grammar because I learned English by myself, never did any class or course and I am from Brazil where we speak Portuguese and not English, I started writing just because I like that I wanted to pass the stories I create to others. If you want to help I accept.

If you want to help I accept. It is the link of my discord in another review I posted.

Well, i can comment in mobile, as it is easier than to edit it as whole, but i can understand what are u writing, so its no serious problem

Hey, i too didn't had any courses, just studied English in University, and well i did discover that i have very well have affinity with it, so... i just began reading novels... Yeah, just like that. Easy, right?

I am honest the story is good, but the reason I give it 1 point is because the author wastes the potential of this novel, first I read only until chapter 34 and I don't know what the cultivation of mc is, grammar is a disgusting, too stuffed, the mc talks to himself about 10 chapters 9 are about the mc talking about his thoughts, there is no emotion, the author has not said what are the cultivation levels of the world, a total waste this novel has been a work of art, but the author wastes it.