Overall, it's a good story. I am only here because the author asked for some criticism on his novel. So here we go: -Put some more spaces in your walls of text. seriously, it makes it hard to read for me. -A little faced paced, but within an acceptable range. -small grammar mistakes, but not enough to stop or interrupt the flow of the story, in my opinion. -Just binge read it so I can't comment on the update stability really. -Story seems rushed, and a little... Unrelatable? try putting some more depth to the characters, some emotional pizazz is also in need here. I would put some more stuff here, but I just couldn't find motivation to read more of this.
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