I don't want your stories rating to drop so I won't rate lower but you write in a way that makes it impossible for anyone that hasn't read the original to understand what's going on. You introduce people and things like everyone reading already knows who/what they are, like "I went to her inn," who's inn? How did he know about it? We get no info and the MC just walks around like everyone knows whats going on
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