Review Detail of KingFischer in The Phoenix Aspect

Looks like i caught up to the editing huh, its a decent story after the edits, with nuanced world building and slight foreshadowing the novel starts off strong, but looses momentum very quickly aswell, 20-30 chapters in it becomes glaringly obvious that the mc has a severe case of alzheimer's disease, when thinking of reasons to live "this rotten life", revenge, the main plotpoint of the story up to here is disregarded for some weak idea that she has to live her life for the sake of the dead girl she awoke in, there is also the case of forgetting her training over and over again, she gets put through such rigorous and cutthroat training that just because of it she exits the training with a severe personality shift towards the more cutthroat and cold veil of experience and lack of care, which was pretty cool, until she forgot about it and went about her day. The only remaining part being her trauma in regards to being trained by that specific trainer. It doesen't end at that, because despite being highly trained and intelligent, she doesen't pick up on how "isha" obviously 1. Knows she has the blood of a phoenix, (she doesent know herself even after what could only be considered very obvious hints) 2. Isha wants to hide this fact from her, for some reason, its not even hinted at in thoughts, isha litterally fumbles his words so gravely that the fact remains obvious to any bypasser, much less the mc, but nah, who cares that the divine artefact fumbled his words and made mistakes, everyone does right? He even gives her a "phoenix cultivation technique" to make up for it... wait... 🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈 The main draw of the novel for me was the idea of a badass mc taking her hard fought but well deserved revenge after being wronged, but i find myself questioning the direction of this novel. Not for me, for now atleast, maybe ill try again after the edits are done. This is my impression upon reading till chapter 42, i reckon that the author is/was(depending on when you read this) around the 40th chapter in regards to editing the chapters, the only thing im taking issue with so far is the motivations and skills of the female lead. I can only assume the release rate was great until the author began editing The writing quality is great after the edits, but i find myself skipping elaborate descriptions of the vaguely related insects in the leaves under the trees of the forest within which she is running from dogs. Too much uneccesary information will break immersion rather than enhancing it, try bringing the readers attention to something in the background, and the bring it back at a later point after it has had an effect on the plot, it'll invest your readers into the background details and allow them to think for themselves without insult to their intelligence, which will help the immersion. I hope you don't take this review too harshly, these are my opinions and you may do what you will with them, i review this harshly only because i see potential in this book, and because i see the potential id love to read it without stopping to berate the mc for being dim. I hope you continue refining your novel, and thank you for the experience