Review Detail of Serious_9895 in The Mech Touch

Story Developement: it doesnt really "develope", there isnt proper cause and effects, No initiative earned, mc doesnt steer the situation. The different Arcs acts more like seasons, and since theres not much character developement either the MC just reacts to these seasons. So how does the story developes? It comes in the form of incoming settings or contrived events and system handouts, the system is the real mc and you get to see how Ves the fake mc fumble through the season with his gifts& handouts. However creating improved mechs has always been the sole progression of both character and story; unfortunately mech creation is almost handled somewhat like a stop gape in between long events most of the time. writing quality: Author doesnt know how to use 3 dollar words at al. He forced in words he doesnt fully understand for no apparent reason. Descriptive words such as ubiquitous or innocuos, inconspicuous should be used as an expression, extentuation, or subtle exaggeration instead or commonly thrown out for no odd reason: he should just use "discreet"or "obvious", "common" "harmless" instead. Unfortunately when its actually time to use the 3dollar exaggerated words as expressions however the auther used translated french words instead for no reason?? je ne comprende pas¿¿ Is the author trying to break english with style? The writing itself is exactly like a gradeschool textbook. If the quotes, action, story progressions are the textbooks diagram and illustrations that are easy to understand; then below each "picture" is a boring lengthy commentations, statements, and grossly false claims such as "all humans are based heartless creatures". eg. mc says after almost having his company taken over "i forgive you this time but if this happens again ill fire you!" after this quote you get bodies of text on how firing him a "bigshot of some kind" would be bad news so although how blatantly beta the mc is there is a self consolation. Almost as if the author knows how beta it is and tries to do immediate damage control. Then he goes on a tangent on mcs pov on that statement alone. Then theresva claim on how "all humans are based greedy animals" and explains why this guy try to take over the company and hed do it again... etc etc drags on... other novels may just mention whats on mcs mind how he will deal with it or organise his thoughts, and react in his mind then execute it slowly. whatever doesnt leave the readers in the dark, treating readers like streetmarket bystanders. world background: a lot of varied backgrounds, a smudge of imagery shown in each at best. a paragraph of adjectives no more for every new setting.. its not enough and feels more like a canvas. chacter design: character doesnt grow, he started off as a hopeless beta with nothing and a thing for taking hits. In fact tve story progresses by the different things hes taking hits from which he does nothing to fix or change himself. taking hits from society before system, the system itself, his cat, business partners, engineers and other designers, bureacracy n gangs, politics n nobles, his mother,master, his famiky, his wife, his kid?. its his system that got him through everything or others doing it for him or telling him what to do. its below average book but the effort made it a story still. Theres obviously no plot or any storyboarding effort. *to the gradeschoolers* story and plot doesnt mean the same thing