I might be a little crazy, but heh ....

Meh...beta mc

Wow, that's a bit... just a little advice, if you want to write a rather dramatic scene or an epic battle, it's better to use 3rd person POV, if you use 1st person POV then it will seem like the MC is bragging. Btw nice chap

bro I like the mc, I like his power, but why do you have to put him in the same generation as naruto? now his actions really don't feel right, what kind of student can escape and escape from the supervision of the village and go to the final camp without being caught, this it just feels like you're forcing the plot of this story for mc. I think if you want to develop mc's power this quickly you should just put it in the itachi or kakashi generation, that would make more sense for the progress of his power and the development of his character, i mean it's a bit strange to see academy students fighting S rank naughty ninja then argue about his ideology, it would make more sense if he was of the same generation as Itachi or Kakashi, that would make more sense. But well after all I like my story, your MC, I just regret the MC's character development which seems rushed and forced for the sake of plot importance.

Firstly....what is he actually doing that for? I know if you have 73% of the power of the strongest swordsman in the world you will definitely want to show off, but bruh... splitting mountains but not even graduating from the academy, he keeps monologuing that Itachi is still better than him, but in the next chapter he even cutting off the top of the mountain just to attract unnecessary attention, men....

Wow, slow down, bro, I know you want to make MC an OP, but you're starting to seem like you're in a rush, he's not even a genin yet and the template is already 73%? (Don't get me wrong I like op mc)

Itachi, heh...

No training? Slow...

Slow...to slow~, but nice chapter btw.

Buruh...that's hurt, btw nice chapter.

PROTEIN

Uwoogh nice

Nice!!

Hey writer San, why do I feel like you always miss events between one chapter and another, and it also seems like your storytelling style is too fast and doesn't go deep enough in your writing, I hope you continue to develop.

Malfoy true friend? Yeah that's riddiculous.

hah...I'm fed up with MC being in Slytherin tbh, it's too mainstream. And I also think you're forcing his friendship with Draco and his henchmen a bit too much, too fast and forced. But yes, because the heroine of this fanfic is Hermione, then I'll keep reading.

Nice chappy

Noice

Slytherin👎