It seems that good taste begets good writing. Your style is very clean, and easy to understand and visualize. I love a good eastern villain. The critique I have is it feels like there should have been a chapter or two prior to explain the character and the world through a possible action scene, reincarnation, or tragedy plot. The world/magic is only as interesting as the character using it. Wonderfully good writing, it just needs your special twist on the genre/magic system and a little more understanding of the character’s motives.

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Hey… that’s my name!!! 👀

Reverend Insanity and Sword God in a World of Magic are my favorite non-romance/harem villain stories. Both stories have the true entire world against only yourself vibe.

Love me a good eastern novel. I like where the book is headed, it’s obvious you have a good idea about the future of your story. Nice writing too, good descriptions and dialogue. My only critique is that it’s very slow in the beginning, I wish you had begun with the pagoda opening instead of the awkward two year training/breakfast montage.

No romance or harem at all for the MC.

Hahahah yes. All will be revealed soon.

Trying to do at least a chapter a day. P.S. Anya the bird will be back!

I really do like your writing, it’s good work. Well above the standard on this site. Wish you the best on your future works.

Sure. I felt like there wasn’t a good sense of who the main character was. Obviously it’s the number, but the voice of whoever it is seemed out of place, or even just off.

Thanks! That picture of the bird with a wig made my day.

Really nice job, the writing is really easy to read and imagine. The only reason it’s not five stars is because I thought the world and character were too simple/cliche. The cripple bag holder with family in the hospital seems bland, overdone, and didn’t need 5+ chapters to get started. Same thing for the powersystem, I wish you had shown how it worked in the first couple chapters instead of simply telling us what was happening around the world. Only giving a critique because it was truly great writing, and I think this has really good potential. My only wish is for you give the backstory/world building more originality and showing through dialogue or action rather than telling through narration.

I like your descriptions! They are very flavorful but clear. The number system to become king is very interesting, along with the multiple people in one body. Enjoyed your book a lot, keep at it!

Nice writing, very pleasant to read. I feel like the story doesn’t really begin until chapter 3 after a lot of coughing and wheezing, but it’s very interesting once you get there.

This is funny as hell. Chapter two when the juiceworld song came on was the first time I’ve physically laughed reading a book in a long time. It’s pretty hard to get through but the character and your narration makes it worth it. I would suggest breaking up the paragraphs a bit more to make it easier to understand but to each there own.

First off, your cover is incredible. Instantly clicked the moment I saw it. After the first chapter, I was intrigued. The stats page for even your hut was done very well, in a way that made me want to read it instead of just skim over everything. Great writing, the main character is not super engaging so far but looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Just read the recent chapters, looking a lot better already. Your stats pages are really clean, keep up the good work. I just started my first book a couple weeks ago too, it is definitely a struggle to edit something you've already posted. I cut two chapters out because I felt like mine wasn't quick enough but you get right to it. I would be thankful if you could give me some feedback too!

You write very well. I like the transmigration without the previous memories, and instead giving eternal power. The only thing I can say is that I didn't really understand the conflict, it took six chapters to hear a mention of the invasion and little explanation of it so far. Keep it up! Very interesting concept.

Your writing is really nice! I like that you took a clichéd character like the lifetime assassin and turned him into a cop. The gamer jargon is a little over the top, but it adds to the comedy of such a troubled character.

You have a nice story pace. The moment I think I'm starting to get bored something interesting happens. The prologue could certainly use some work, the first couple chapters in particular, but I like when the transmigration begins. The mystery of figuring out what is actually different about this new world is always exciting.