Yeah, I understand that; what I meant here wasn't that, but more along the lines of "this came out of nowhere" - it's OBVIOUSLY related to something in-world, but to me as a reader it came outta nowhere, whereas if it had been hinted at a little - even by a passing student saying something like "my dad got me this tier-x bone" or something. Though dialogue would've put more attention on it than necessary.

Overall: An amazing book that draws you in constantly. It's been my favorite "turn your brain off and enjoy the ride" novel these days and I've been enjoying it. Writing Quality: It's immaculate for a novel on Webnovel. "Grammar" and the like are good, and I rarely saw any typos. Now, the reason I say "for a novel on Webnovel" is simply put; the writing STYLE. Which is very good for a reader that's just chilling, and/or one that would be reading it on a daily basis. However, if I were to be critical with the style, it would not pass for a "professional novel" style (which is a more western style[i.e. take any traditionally published work], whereas Entrail writes more eastern, Korean style being the most prominent influences). This is, again, NOT A BAD THING. Just my thoughts. The writing goes quite in depth into fight scenes and features original ideas. Grammar Score: Perfect no mistakes here. Stability of Updates: uh, well, I just wish Entail doesn't burn himself lol. He's posting way too much. Story Development: It's been rather slow as of now(ch 47), and the reason for that is understandable. Entrail spends quite some establishing the setting and characters, and that's quite important. However, recently, the plot seems to have started picking up, so I am not complaining there. Even the "slow" start is enjoyable as I like to immerse myself in the lives of the characters and the world, and rushing straight to fights when we don't even care about the characters would be, quite literally, dumb. So, Entrail's been cool so far. Character Design/Score: The mc is competent, and I quite like the emotive way Entrail decided to go with his character. The "stop lemme show you the emotions" scene when he uses the first emotive spell was quite jarring as the pacing came to a halt, but I got used to it and Entrail doesn't quite dwell on that stuff for long. Again, this is not a complaint but one of the plus of this novel--the emotions are high with this novel (given "emotions" is literally the theme of this novel from what I'm getting so far) and Entrail's quite good with portraying them. The other characters are also well done. And while this novel, too, has those moments of showing each character - be it male or female - as earth shattering beauties, Entrail doesn't dwell on it much, and I can't quite blame him for doing so. This is, after all, webnovel. You gotta cave in to the platform you write on a little. The other characters are good, too, with Kiera being my favorite so far. World Background: So far, it's been only on the academy, with some stuff on the empires and recently delving into the Mirror Dimension a bit (which, quite frankly, has potential to be very unique if Entrail manages to pull it off). I won't say much here to avoid spoilers but it's solid.

ironically this is funnier than his jokes 🤣

to clarify my above paragraph's comment a little, this felt like it came out of nowhere thus why a lil foreshadowing would've been nice. it might just be that I didn't notice if you DID leave any hints, but i wanted to point it out so you can keep it in mind in the future :]

you maybe add a little foreshadowing in one of the previous chapters? not really necessary as this is a webnovel but just food for thought

ngl bones seem a lil unrelated to everything that's been established for the world so far but its's fine ig (i could just be wrong and there's more to it but eh) just to be clear, it's not a criticism and it wasn't meant to be.

huh, why?

strange way to establish his competency, but I like it. rarely is there anything related to making food. it's literally an art form, and whenever i see something it makes me feel nice. now THIS is the representation I want lol. good job!

haha, I knew this chap was gonna be the kickstarter. Here it is ladies and ladies, the inciting event of the game. well, I'd still say to take your time with things author. this novel is my fav brain-off time pass and I'm selfishly gonna ask u to take care of yourself so i can continue reading this 🙏

are you sure about that 🗿

*i trust author so i don't really care about waiting .

heres's the inciting incident of the "game" lol. lets's see how much the plot kicks off. regardless, i trust author dont really care about waiting. even lotm was slow af before kicking off.

a personal 10/10 chap for me. the professor is my favorite character atm lol. i hope he's a reoccurring character (even as a villain)

sad

wn app glitched, this comment is afor few lines after. "then it became clear to me"

*him

very good saying ngl. gonna steal that.

lol.

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