Overall, this novel has great grammar, fluid caracter interactions, and a solid plot. As you'll learn in the 1st chapter, the mc starts in Harry's 4th year with no recollection of his life as a wizard. Why and how he was transported remains obscure, and is something that I hope is addressed further in the novel. Similarly, the way the mc uses magic is abnormal for the HP world. (minor spoiler ahead) He uses a form of wandless magic that seems to allow him complete freedom of how to use it (no fancy wand waving, no speaking). Additionally, he starts with light Occulemcy. He joins up with the Golden Trio and gets sorted into Gryffindor, but is more Ravenclaw oriented (Hat said it not me). He seems good natured, not particularly greedy or lustful, and is shown to pay back favors. The love interest seems to be Hermione, but could be Luna. I should also mention that the mc is hesitant to flirt with Hermione cuz he thinks he would be NTRing Ron. Speaking of Ron, this is not for Ron haters. The author does of great job of redeeming Ron, and making him an enjoyable character. Read as of Chapter 20, so Story Development and World Background are only graded as of right now. P.S.: my grading is 5 5 4 4 5

Thank you for posting once more author. 🫡

I meant: immerse themselves / throw the reader off Ps. Just remembered another minor mistake: you don't put a coma , before ending the dialog. Ex: "Hello there," he said...

Using quotations "" is the standard when writing dialog, and allows the reader to I'm.erse themselves in the novel. Additionally, ' ' is commonly used for thoughts so when you use those for dialog it throughs people off. I've also noticed a few capitalisation errors : they should be used at the beginning of a paragraph, dialog, and thoughts. Your story has a great premise, hope you continue! P.S.: you may have already included some elements by the time I'm writing this, but just in case... :)