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I don’t mind mind control but it just feels like it came out of no where like there would be a better way to approach girls. Like ask her out on a date and make a move to kiss after some drinking or something. Or run into her in the dungeon and have one of them slip and fall on each other or have them find eachother solo and hunt together and she goes into heat or something.
It seems like there are more important things than getting a healthcare check up right now and whether he should even trust goblin doctors especially ones in charge of managing the last heir to a families massive wealth I know author can protect him with the the power of story telling but please think before you do this in real life guys.
Glad that dill weed didn’t get saved also just hate Rei in general IMO I’d leave Rei on the roof and hang with my bro takashi maybe hook him up with one of sloots from creepy sensei’s gang after I cap him. Seiko is the only girl I care about. Maybe the Nurse and red head too.
This chapter felt as glimpsing upon the profound I stopped in the middle to write a personal journal, for nearly an hour, getting out many thoughts, feelings, and frustrations about life only to find some of the same words and ideas I wrote were also among the latter part of the chapter it was quite a strange feeling.
Honestly I see a lot of hate for this ark I didn’t mind it being able to read it quickly but I will say it is unreasonable that the MC didn’t realize during many moments including when he was announcer making completely in appropriate jokes and ruining his families image, even though it wasn’t mentioned family honor should at least be important as a pretext to someone inhabiting an extremely wealthy scions body. And now we learn that Allan the almighty greatest mind master of his self created golden age is a pucey and feels bad about obliviating 1 death row inmate like seriously this guy is 150+ years old and lived through many wars as a freaking top tier mind mage and feels bad about killing 1 person he should have a body count in the hundreds or thousands realisticly. You shouldn’t get to be the best mind mage of all time without countless experiments of such a level. A publisher would have certainly removed this or changed it to a much more disturbing event. But the story beyond that is incredibly impressive after trying to write recently myself I understand how difficult it is so respect to the author for everything else being to a high level.
I am dropping this story. Leaving the sword might accomplish some future scenario you want to create but it’s completely stupid to leave your most powerful weapon behind it was the only thing that gave him a chance against the lvl 1k shapeshifter. I even think it’s op and should at least have the skill in Fage form or time locked. Not only that but a few chapters ago he killed 20 kids to get a mission reward he’s never turned one down yet but now he does???
As of chapter 20 I really like the story it’s perfectly depraved, callus, and full of the sense of adventure you can only get from sci-fi. It is direct and skips the filler that I don’t enjoy reading anyway. My only qualm is that a functioning ecosystem should have a little bit more variety but because the devour skill it needs to be artificially limited to control power scaling. I’m rating it high now but it’s still early and I would like to see many more chapters. Keep working hard Author <3
The focus on food is getting a bit heavy these last couple chapters hopefully some action soon or at least some more romantic progression at this point MC has a harem of “friends” where nothing ever happens but eating and pooping still one of the better Naruto fanfics out there so good work
Honestly author really not thinking big enough the greatest martial art is the one the kind of their country practices? Where are the ancient lost manuals what about all these foreign potion brewers in description from far away lands your puny king has the best martial art in history? Ridiculous. Also the pricing disparity is annoying cure you body that’s dying 100k points rather cheap cure your mother 10k gold coins or 100 mil points I mean come on it was a random muchroom or berry if she secretly had a super powerful background who poisoned her it would make sense but this is ridiculous plus he could heal his mother right now with holy drop and cure himself with lust system with a few kisses. He misses the general talent improvement but it solves years of hard work conquering cities just to buy it. Major plot holes all in this system. Also with spending all this money that was going to be so hard to get for sister who won’t be powerful enough to beat the farther for years. It just doesn’t make sense.
I agree if it needs to be done then either let someone tell mc explicitly or add in a little foreshadowing like “outside the door the maid shed a tear and muttered I wish the patriarch would stop suppressing this boy” or something because when characters act weirdly with no explanation they just feel like plot devices and the story feels hollow