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Arima5445dCommentedSo the OG Rio would’ve definitely died even if he reached the peak of his potential
'I think this place is actually made according to the survival abilities of a peak B ranker.' (Rio)- Arima5446dCommented
Rio’s Pov… yet a 3rd person description
While passing by the talking students Rio just shook his head after hearing their nonsense. - Arima5447dCommented'Now that I have a way to become strong myself… I don't need to worry about these small changes…' (Jareth)
- Arima5447dCommentedDid that work last exam?
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Meanwhile modern universities 💀💀💀
"Isn't it? Let the children take out loans to go to school, and then work for you for half their lives after graduation. Haha, even the greediest goblin didn't expect such an operation." - Arima54412dPosted
Nice story so far, definitely not the cliche Harry Potter fanfic. Author introduced nice OC’s and the MC is written well. Unlike most HP fic’s, the MC is generally a mentally stable guy who’s a little shameless when it comes to money but that only adds to his charm. Grammar is good too, hopefully there will be stable updates. If anything my only criticism would be that the pacing is a little slow (25 chapters in and it’s only beginning the first year). All in all though, great FF, looking forward to future updates
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They do address her as ‘her’ in the next sentence, so it def was a typo… I hope
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- Arima54414dCommentedI returned her embrace, a smile playing on my lips.
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I love the gaslighting 🤣
"No, I... Rika has been visiting my office frequently, claiming she preferred it over the cafeteria. She had also asked for a return on part of the class tax she had paid to me, saying she needed the money for personal expenses…" I trailed off, my voice quivering with false uncertainty. "I had no idea..." - Arima54415dCommented
The realism of your writing really improves the quality of this fic. I think this was a good chapter, just enough darkness without going into cringe or unrealistic territory. Overall keep up the good work, liking this fanfic more then the L one tbh
Strategically, I'm sure Light would do something like this, but I don't know; felt a bit messed up writing this, considering the amount of thought I put into these scenarios; as you can imagine, it is kinda messed up detailing in your mind step by step how to fuck someone up like this in a realistic and functional manner. I actually try to put myself in the mind of whatever character I'm writing and also think about things from the lens of the opposing character too. Usually, dark stuff doesn't bother me at all, but maybe because of all that, and the focus on catching Kei's emotions I sympathized with her and it did this time. Or maybe I'm just being soft. - Arima54420dCommented
It’s realistic considering that Ayanokoji wasn’t contributing to the class before he was forced to do so by chabs. Good chapter
I think some people may be upset class d and ayanokoji to a loss this quickly or easily but I think it's pretty realistic that this could happen in the original if someone had leaked the midterm exam. - Arima54422dCommented
Emokoji
Not like a birthday matters, it's just the day I was born, and my fate was sealed, to be eternally being trapped inside the White Room. - Arima54422dCommented
Kinda like with yagami then?
"The more hate I felt, the more I felt my Potential being limitless, honestly..." - Arima54424dCommented
All hail Lelouch
Lelouch in COTE - Arima54425dCommented
+1
Option 3: Hikigaya goes to Class A and creates a faction to rival Sakayanagi and Katsuragi. - Arima54425dCommented
Pathetic
"Even if it's a competition, I still want to make fri-" - Arima5441mthCommentedThis paragraph has been deleted.
- Arima5441mthCommentedWord Count (Don’t Read)