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Fantastic writing and Great characters. I really like the whole take on Aliens and Ai in this story. It brings a life to this Mc Kai who also has a system. The action scenes were splended and I progression was well paced. This was very interesting. This world gets more interesting the more you read it. (I may just be a sucker for non-human stuffs, but I cannot deny it was a good read).
What you got here is a good story. the characters are amazing, the story is also well done and the style of writing was easy to flow through. The world building, I would say it somewhat builds progressively but there are detailed descriptions. And the Action kept me engaged to the story. Although this is good, in the beginning there is a few running on sentences. You would want to add a full stop to not have those sentences go on like that. This is the only problem iv'e noticed as everything else seemed on point. The Author does improve in later chapters though so I would still give it to them. I'll say this was still a worthwhile read.
Well uh.... that was quite the strange adventure, but I like strange! Great job there. I mean when I saw the title of this I was like 'There's no way they can pull this off...' Suprise! They managed to do it and somehow , someway get you into it. Humor , entertainment, well-written characters? all there. Of course, some things are like 'wtf' but beyond that, it's actually a whole adventure. Good on you. I am giving it to you.
What the chicken mc nuggets is this?
I liked everything about this world . The system there is pretty interesting and fun. It provides a unique blend on things. The characters were pretty good though , there are a few grammatical errors. They aren't that heavy but some common words. Also the use of terms like cut were done in overuse. It is funny but also . I believe you don't have to do it so long. That's just my opinion. Overall I found this world interesting and so should readers. This is full of cool action.
I have to say I didn't expect this to be as good as it was. I liked the characters and the action scenes they were pretty nice. The concept of what was written was pretty unique and 'hot' (lol). But I liked the relationship that built up with the characters the most. It sorta reminds me of something I can't put my finger on but either way, pretty solid and hooking. Before I knew it I was reading more and more. The only problem I had was really the transitions. sometimes they happen a bit 'too' fast. That sometimes threw me off. I know it is mentioned where they are going but it would be nice to see their arrival sometimes. That's the only thing from me, everything else hit's right. Good writing.
This is a Good story for what I have read. The story does move along at a slow pace which is not necessarily bad. The characters were introduced in a way that you would be able to get a picture of who they were and they had some good dynamics. This is the strong point. But I do need to address some of the Grammar as there is some I have to note. First of all, when you are writing for the dialogue you should stick to a tense for the characters. It can get confusing if you say ' Here is what happened, I went to the front and then I would slap them'(Just an example). It does not sound right so I do believe that this is an area which needs improvement as it can be seen many times. There are others that could be stylized better to incorporate a better Dialogue narrative as with some improvements, the dialogue could be amazing. Overall though, the Story dominates as it holds up the interest in the chapters and if you are willing to look past the mistakes you still have a story which can draw you in with well -rounded characters and nice world.
Great story. I like the idea the way it was put down with the time ability which made things interesting from the start. There are a few spelling mistakes throughout the chapters which can be noticed for a few words but it is not very frequent. While they don't take away from the story it is something that could be fixed by the Author with a quick review over their chapter. I was able to follow the plot well despite the many focuses on the system stuff and enjoyed it.
Now you see, I may be a little bias because this is some power I wanted myself but I should say that the writing is applied well in gaining this awakening of their power. It is good through and through . It does stake a few chapters to get off the ground and get into exploring the ability but it is fine when the story behind it keeps it flowing. It is something I intend to keep on reading and others should join me. Because it's cloning. Did I say how much I like the concept of clones? I know there is one famous cloning thing but now this looks like it could be the next. Interesting.
When I started reading this, I didn't know what to expect when I started reading. The Story gets into it taking a turn I did not expect to see and it was a wonderfully crafted scene that had great writing in the beginning. I enjoyed seeing the characters and their interactions towards this development. They were portrayed well. The Story takes a nice turn to it and I have to say it was enjoyable . As far as the style of writing, it has a unique style which set it apart from others with some spice over everything to make it nice.
This premise on healing was something I always used to think about before in that I had my mind on a story like this, and I saw healing stories before, but nothing like this which was quite unique in the way it went about it It made me curious about the Mc's ability and how far this would be capable of going. I know it has a few chapters to it but those few chapters were quite Good. the Author's Style has a unique style which one may say is like a poet but of a certain different blend to it and crafted the story in quite an artful way. I rather like the way they have started out. I have no doubt that in the future this will continue to be a great story.
Love the concept and the story's pretty cool. For the Characters I can say they were done well but unfortunately I don't think there is one that really gives a 'standout' feeling to me, which is fine as you don't get that with every story. Story is a nice concept but I do have to say in regards to the quality this is where I see a small thing here. At least for me. While I like the story, the style and grammar is also something that is just as important to consider. I believe this has style but I know that they can improve it as well as there are some Grammar issues ; however, I believe people will still enjoy the concept and the story you are crafting.
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This story was a nice read . The Author has their own style of writing which presents things with a clear picture and seems to blend an explanation with unique ways to show the characters and their development. The Quality of writing is top notch and it provides unique characters within it's setting.