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It's okay, but very boring. Alot of it, seems like a cultivation novel. And the problem with cultivation novels is that it's too technical, and feels like you are reading a textbook, which makes you sleepy. Also the MC has a really conservative attitude- rude to people for no reason, close minded etc. which ticks me of. If you want something with good grammar, and like cultivation novels this is for you.
This novel is so confusing, I don't even know where to start. The beginning of the novel is terrible and throws you into the story with absolutely no context. Reincarnators? Panda country? Some sort of livestream? Soldiers? You have no fucking idea what's going on. Then the next fucky thing, is the people in the livestream are fucking annoying and their useless comments take up 60% of the chapter only to contribute very little to the plot. The style of the novel gives me third rate Chinese webnovel vibes. This is why anime is more successful than cheap Chinese shit.
The idea has alot of potential is really interesting but the writing quality just ruins it. The story is a solid 4 but the grammar and terrible readability bring it down to a 3. I tried reading it while ignoring the grammar, but it always ruins the authenticity of the plot. Can you imagine Icebergs secretary saying: "Then also, I got a phone call from the Navy Side" 'Then also'? Navy Side? It's a mid 20s women talking, not a a 6 year old. If you want it increase your rating, please just improve the grammar! Use something like G Docs and read over your work before posting.
The writing quality is amazing, but the MC gives of this arrogant vibe and is annoying (esp the 'chuckle' in the middle of the sentences). Addressing Rias as 'duchess' at Kuoh Academy and acting the whole noblesse thing was kinda cringe. The MC is also a showoff that flexes his wealth at every opportunity he gets- even if it doesn't give him any advantage to do so. I don't know if the author will delete this, but if you don't mind the whole showy noble guy act I think this story is a solid 4/5. Personally guys who act like a spoilt noble rich kid flexing their shit 24/7 annoy me and hence it's a 3 from me. PS: That smirk in the thumbnail is punchable.
This is a really good fic, and has everything I have been looking for. A vanilla gamer story is better than any of the 'unique' crazy ones out there. You have my power stones.
Let me start out by saying the grammar is absolutely terrible.But excluding that, it's actually a pretty mid read. Excluding grammar, it's not the best or the worst. It's something you would read if you can't find anything else to read. The characters have a little bit of humor in them, but have the same generic trope to their personality. Eg: Mikan the cook, has the same bossy selfish personality as Nami The world building is okay, and mostly derived from the original anime.