Story and main character that is interesting, plus really good comedic elements. Pokemon choices are surprising, most of them are underutilized in Pokemon fanfics which makes them feel refreshing and they're developed well. System is also useful and pushes the MC and story forward in a non-intrusive way. Overall a very fun work.

Thanks for all your hard work

The fights are actually pretty good, I'm not really sure what can be improved about them. The only thing I noticed kinda related to fights is that his names for his Constellation Breathing forms... really suck. They just sound dull and uninteresting.

The writing gives a big impression that it was assisted by ChatGPT. This isn't necessarily a hard turn-off for everyone, but it is for me because it lacks the personality of an individual's writing style, and most importantly, it doesn't read like a human would.

Isn't this ripped from Is It Wrong To Employ Cute Girls In A Store??

Why is Asterius' name romanized as if it was spoken by a Japanese speaker? Just call it Asterius

Too much laughing. We don't need "Hahahaha Hahahaha Hahahah Hahahahaha" it just makes mc look like an unhinged maniac. You can literally just narrate and say he laughed with joy (or more accurately, he laughed like an insane madman released from a psych ward!)

yeah this might as well be date rape. like "oops! i dropped all this aphrodisiac in your drink! it's not my fault i can't help it!" what's the difference between wish-fulfillment and this? wish-fulfillment can still be well-written, but this is just garbage written by someone who is most likely a danger to society and women.

What if... I wrote like this... and you... had to read it... because... I love ellipses... and pointless pauses... in dialogue... and in narration... and in everything basically... but y'know... it's okay... because... all those ellipses... will slowly add up... to fill out more pages... which means... more characters per chapter... because... every period... means one additional character... wow... dang... heck... dagnabbit... wallaballoo... ao-ao-awoooo... grrr bark snarl... CAN YOU PLEASE STOP DOING THIS?? It's genuinely so distracting and destroying my enjoyment of an otherwise decent (so far) story, seriously. I don't want to come off as too aggressive/combative but the EXCESSIVE use of ellipses is really harming your writing.

I must admit a fondness for fanfictions that make use of OCs or main characters that diverge from their original stories with NO otherworldly knowledge of the setting (i.e. usual self-insert stuff like reincarnation or transmigration with wishes.) The author expands on some things that are pretty much completely unexplored in DxD, adds plenty of character development, and most importantly, is not writing a brainless smut with women that fall in love with MC in one encounter that lasts for less than an hour or something equally ridiculous. (DxD is an ecchi so those kinds of fanfics are expected, but I adore when there is more effort and consideration put into the world and characters, and fanfic authors confidently allow their stories to veer completely off-course of canon. After all, to me, it is ridiculous to write a fanfic only to have it follow canon... what are you even writing a fanfic for, at that point? I get the whole "b-b-but muh future knowledge!!" argument they love to throw around in the case of SI and reincarnation/transmigration, but even those minor changes are likely to ruin that future knowledge in some way... or some authors say that they will only make minor changes at the start and slowly the scale will expand and by the end the entire story has changed, or something, but in the end it doesn't play out like that... anyways, rant over.) It really feels that the author is passionate and treats DxD setting as a playground or sandbox, and is injecting their own ideas into the world. If I have anything to say about it, it would just be that the writing itself is simple and direct, but it's completely sufficient and may even be better that way for a casual read that's easy on the eyes. All in all, a good fanfic! Thanks, author!

usually don't do reviews but felt like sharing my thoughts here. story is really good, feels grounded in reality. many fanfics have a tunnel vision focused on the MC; it feels like the world outside of the MC (or whoever's POV) is frozen and only becomes active when they become relevant to the MC. the main character is definitely Hector, most of the time we are following him, his thoughts and actions, but we also get enough of other characters to understand that everything is in constant flux irrespective of Hector. another good point of this story is that we often get to see the wider influence of Hector's actions. it feels more natural that way, instead of being directly told by the author/narrator. also, the majority of the characters are well-developed and form a good feedback loop of interactions with Hector. every character has something they offer for Hector's growth as a character while not sacrificing their individuality or personality, and they in turn also grow with Hector. this is especially in the case of the core circle of summons, but still applies to other side characters too; nobody is badly ignored. the updates come slowly, but chapters are very content-packed and filling. not like some other fanfics that have <1k word chapters that you can read in a minute or less.

coming too late to make a difference but hoping i can give some constructive criticism, but imo one of the issues with these kinds of stories is how much they focus on how handsome/pretty a character is that it makes everyone give exaggerated reactions like being stunned, not able to speak properly, etc. etc.. i think it makes the characters less believable bc it's an unrealistic reaction and there's no point for a character to be so handsome/pretty that it causes others to act like that. also with systems or game-like elements, i think it's more natural if stats like "charm" don't affect appearance but instead work to increase charisma, likability, social skills etc. (within reason)