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    Its #1 one Webnovel's All-Time chart for novels, check it out

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    Shadow Slave by Guiltythree, its arguably one of the best webnovels ever/

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    No, the Armorer.

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    They used candles, wax usually doesn't let out smoke. But they also used torches during explorations because they were harder to put out. Although, that would be disingenuous in underground ruins due to the possibility of suffocation.

    As this young man who was climbing the stairs to the upper level of the imposing castle breathed, vapors could be seen thanks to the torch in his hand, and after seemed hundreds of steps, he reached a hallway that led toward more rooms, but his target was the last room on the end of the hallway.
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    You'll find out when its time

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    Hello, thank you for your criticism, it was very helpful and I'll take note of what you've said and work on it. A few things in this list have been done on purpose due to the past of the actual character or the protagonist. 1. The character is flat and boring because the memories of his entire childhood and formative years were wiped away, he is sort of a blank slate, which makes things like conversations and dialogue hard for him. His memory is not perfect either, so he can't remember everything about the pre-time skip, and none of it would be helpful as he is living during the time skip. 2. As I said he is a blank slate, and his goals and ambitions will have to be fleshed out in the future, and I'll be taking care of that quite soon. 3. The character will be strong in the future, but never OP. He won't be someone who steamrolls through everyone and everything. 4. I don't want to info-dump, and most of these things are already known to the reader through implication, like his strength being a bit over the Vice-Admiral level. 5. You're right about Holman, I hadn't even planned him until I wrote him down, but he is more than meets the eye. You're right about everything else though, it would help a lot if I wrote more descriptively. Thanks for your criticism, I hope you keep reading!

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    Sure

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    Agreed, I'ma make the training arc one of the most interesting arcs ever

    The Flame-Flame Fruit, which once belonged to Ace, was on this island. Castellan wanted it for himself.
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    Castellan (pre transmigration) - Is a little stronger than Dressrosa Zoro, his high bounty is also attributed to various things outside his strength 1. Cipher Pol inflated his bounty thinking that he would eat the devil fruit - And it is an extremely powerful fruit so it would match his strength 2. He is a pirate who mostly attacks Marines, he has caused more trouble for them than the Straw Hats did by breaking into Enies Lobby - making him a pirate that is a huge threat to the World Government, some Marines even think he is related to the Revolutionary Army 3. Some of his family members have infiltrated the Navy, and they try to increase his bounty in hopes of making the Warlords go after him

    It read, 'CASTELLAN, WANTED DEAD OR ALIVE, 700,0000,000 BELI'
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    I'm glad!

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    Did you like the chapter?

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    Thank you!

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    What Oda did is not a mistake, it's near perfection for the One Piece world. However, for my fanfic which I'm trying to make medium-paced, it is a bit too fast, I'll add changes (done by Castellan himself) to make it slightly slower, about double the time - 4 or 5 months. I'm not talking about the power progression but rather the plot itself which encompasses the power progression. And with the new arcs, it'll even help the Straw Hats get stronger than they are at Post-Wano, hope you enjoy it!

    I would also like to let you know that as this is an AU, I will be straying from the original plotline a lot. I didn't like how quickly the straw hats progressed from a strong New World crew to a Yonko-level crew within two months after the time skip, I will be changing that by making my own arcs and characters to elongate the journey and make it realistic. I will still try to maintain the original characters and keep them integral to the story as much as I can.
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    You have no idea how happy this comment makes me. What I mean is, sometimes I skip over important facts and make mistakes like the one with Kuzan which can break the reader's immersion. I also believe I can increase my writing quality with more time, just trying to do the best I can. Hope you enjoy it!

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    I'm writing it so that it isn't following the plot of one piece and I haven't used a "fun" tag on my novel either. I added the "dark" tag because I want to write something dark, and things like that need time to build. I don't want my character to just be a one-time enemy of Luffy, I'm trying to write something completely different than what you want to read. I suggest you just drop my fanfic because it doesn't seem like you'll enjoy it.

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    Look I understand that you think my work is garbage, but could you at least leave some constructive criticism so I can fix whatever you think is wrong? Also, if you think my work is so bad then why are you still reading and commenting on my chapters?

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    Aokiji is extremely strong and while its possible for Castellan to reach that level quickly like Luffy became Yonko level post-TS, it would be hard to write as I want to do a medium paced storyline and make it 'realistic'.

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    Anytime

    Ch 6 Like Moths To A Flame
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    Anything you want to say about what I did wrong?

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    I don't really understand your question so I'll assume you're asking how Castellan will recruit his crew. There are three ways he will go about doing this. 1. Defeat someone in battle and ask them to join just like Luffy did with Franky. 2. Help someone out and then ask them to join just like Luffy did with Zoro and Nami. 3. As he sails and gets stronger, his name will spread far and wide so many will seek him out to join his crew.

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